This squad is much stronger than your other one, IMHO.
I'm not sure what Nyna does, other than giving SuperStealth to your two Gran raiders; if you're concerned about your swap fodder surviving, then I think you'd be better off just dropping her for more grans. Dropping her and working in a Czerka Scientist would also go a LONG way to improving your TBSVs as shooters...it makes them each attack 4x per round rather than 2x.
Another option is to drop a TBSV for Arden Lyn...she would gain double-twin with Vader's CE, and she's much stronger vs melee figs. But maybe you'd prefer to keep the 2nd TBSV, especially if you worked a Czerka into the squad.
I assume Palleon is there for swapping Vader Legacy for LV, which is a useful option. He's also useful for nerfing fprrs on evades (place your TBSV's in the ysalamiri bubble, so that the targets of their attacks cannot use fp's).